New song

I have been working on this song for a couple of days. It's a very personal song so I probably won't change much but give me your opinion.

E             D

Sometimes you feel all alone

A                      E

All on your own it's a shame

E             D    

Sometimes you just want to be

A                                E

Left alone to be free and that's all







Bm   D  A                   E          

Tell me who I'm supposed to be

Bm         D            A                         E  

Is my life real or if I close my eyes will it disappear







E             D

Sometimes the dues that you pay

A                    E

Day after day are in vein

E             D

Sometimes you work and you slave 

A                       E

For an early grave it's insane









Bm   D  A                   E

Tell me who I'm supposed to be

Bm         D            A                         E

Is my life real or if I close my eyes will it disappear











F#m           A          F#m                A

We're all the same we're just pawns in this game

   F#m          A            Bm             D             E

Of life we must play but for all of use the game will end someday









E             D 

Sometimes the ones that you love 

    A                           E

Get called from above and their gone

E             D

Sometimes the pain that you feel

   A                           E  

Is all that seems real in this place











Bm   D  A                    E     

Tell me who am I supposed to be

Bm         D            A                         E

Is my life real or if I close my eyes will it disappear



Bm   D  A                    E   

Tell me who am I supposed to be

Bm         D            A                         E

Is my life real or if I close my eyes will it disappear

 

I left out all the breaks and solos, but this is the basics of the song. I will try to have it on myspace in the next week or so.

hmm, kool... its kinda hard evaluating music w/o hearing the rythm and timing, looking forward to it on myspace, wuts ur channel, is it public? im not a mem.

i like it, not a huge fan of the E to D though.. and u used the wrong vain =p

is it gonna be acoustic style?? or tell us the style

LesPaul,
excellent job. The lyrics are "real" and from the heart. nicely done. I'll try it with the guitar in the morning.
Phip

@Soy
It sounds good on both acoustic or electric but I think I like it better on acoustic. Has a natural feel to it if you know what I mean. The riffs and solos will be on my les paul.

@Phip
Thanks glad you like it. It has a slow rhythm to it but not to slow.

I was reading it in my head i was hearing the southern rock sound right on great work.

Have you started recording it yet? Cant' wait to hear it

whats the melody??? there are plenty of songs with those exact chords, but the melody will define it.

Great song! If you can use theright pitches I do think E and D could work,but if youhave your doubts I think E and B are great with each other aswell as A that you already got, but I think if you play and sing it right you can pull E and D off no problem.

Can't wait to hear it! (I also think it feels like Southern rock reading it.)