Hi, been a fun last year with agc and when I analyze past year, I may not improved that much technically (got a little thou), but a more theoretically. Big thanks to all great people on agg who been...erm... patient with me :D.
so, I made a promise to this year to make an album, where every song is carefully thought by theoretical approach. Well... I made my first and I call it... Level Up haha... some of the older wolfs here might remember my earlier "songs" I shared... well... Im more happy with this than past recordings. So feedback is very welcome, especially what comes to acoustic parts. Also structure, chord progression..if you have something in mind.
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I really enjoyed this tune Emp, very laid back. The only suggestion I have would be that it could use some lower sounds, it seems like it is lacking a bass groove or something, but the playing and the composition is really nice dude! I am looking forward to more tunes.
The song has a lot of layers to it but the beginning, the intro with the piano ONLY, needs to be longer so that it establishes something. I didn't really know where the song was going, meaning it didn't seem like the song was in any type of structure, (though I knew when it was a solo and not a solo). This song needs a leader with abeit followers. It sounds like maybe the whole song is just one big intro with no middle or ending in sight. Nothing builds or breaks down and I don't know what you want to emphasize in the song like a riff, lick or chorus etc. etc. Nothing stands out which can be good or bad. In the end it's hard to go against the musicianship as it's very good but since nothing stands out like a hypnotic melody or pounding bass line, one will not remember how good the musicians played.
Thanks a lot for the feedbacks, really appreciate them. Thanks J.R.M for valuable tips. As Im very beginner in composing these feedbacks come really good use. I will think about this structure again and try to build a theme better.
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Great recording man. This was well thought out and performed. Much improved.
Here is what I liked:
The piano riff was fantastic. Simple, but it served it's purpose very well.
I like that you kept the rhythm guitar simple as well.
The lead work matched very well with the underlying comp.
Things to improve:
Lead guitar tone was a little to "rocky" for the context. Try a smoother, jazzier sound next.
Btimm is right, a song like this needs a finite bass groove.
While I liked that your rhythm git was simple, perhaps adding a little more flair to bridges would help.
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I enjoyed it. I just think you need to work on the making the sound tighter. Work on your timing with the lead guitar a bit, and try to have everything sound more 'together'. Good work though.