Your lyrics, poems or poetry.

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Drown With You
It's never to late to find the meaning to be true,
you can't always try to make a better you.
with that shadow hanging around,
making your words and screams never to be heard.
your drowning in the darkness, as it consumes you...

I'm not supposed to think of you, I'm not supposed to care.
I'm not supposed to live my life wishing you were there.
I'm not supposed to wonder where you are or what you do.
But I'm sorry, I can't help my self because I'm in love with you.

I can't take out the evil, I can't always be there,
But I seen you falling in to darkness, as I dived in for you.
I'm holding out my hand as if it's a light that only shines for you.
Your heart is open but there in no light shining through,

As I fall with you now in your shadow.
Shedding a tear of ice because there's no more light with in,
but my love for you could never end.
As we reach in each other's hearts to feel what it means to be loved,
But leaving a scar that could never be forgotten.

I'm not supposed to think of you, I'm not supposed to care.
I'm not supposed to live my life wishing you were there.
I'm not supposed to wonder where you are or what you do.
But I'm sorry, I can't help my self because I'm in love with you.

We're drowning in the darkness, as it consumes us.
We both offer out are hand
because in the end both of us knew we were falling into the darkness,
but I just wanted to drown with you...
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Last Words
I've seen so many faces, they took me to many places,
I hope for one wish, but still living a lost dream.
I heard so many lies, felt so little truths,
I digged inside your soul, but never broke your heart.
From my moon and my sun, what is it do you see?
For bitter and sweet, please don't forget me.

Time passes by, but yet I still try,
Maybe I'm just a fool still waiting here for you.
My life flows to dust, never to be held.
I'm so sick of it all, not that you would care.
no one understands what I've come to see,
I don't expect you to understand me.
I'm not filled with hate nor that of sorrow.
I've just grow cold and come to think of it as home.

You don't need to cry for me, when the time comes too me.
I'm not a afraid to die, I'm just not going to give it a try.
But who am I trying to fool I'm just so afraid,
that this generation is being lead to astray.
Because it's so easy to be a fool, ya, easy to be cool,
ya!, it's easy to be hunger when you ain't got nothing to lose.

I know your searching for the answer, your looking for the truth,
But would you even believe it, even if it was told to you?
with your sick and minded, sprite. The mirror tells you lies
for there is someone else I see behind your eyes.
Will he escape your soul or well he live in you?
Is he trying to get out or trying to enter you?

So that's why I take a pen and paper and write down what I know,
because when I look inside your eyes I can see your true soul.
Maybe I'm just another madman writing in my book,
praying to God for you to see the same shadows too,
but is there any body out there who can fly above all this noise and confusion,
to get a glimpse of this world beyond it's illusion?

It took so long to realize, that there no more hope left inside.
now all my days are filled with tears,
I wish I could go back and change these years.
My eyes are only set on the open shore as I see the coming storm.
I forgive those who try to tear down my soul,
as I bliss you that you may grow old.

These are my last words as I must say good bye.
Because with all the changing seasons of my life
maybe I'll get it right next time...
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Path to Paradise

Look into those eyes of Blue;
You will see a heart of gloom.
But why must you feel this pain;
When you have no reason to be ashamed?
You say to me you’re not afraid;
But I see clearly that you’re tied with chains.
These binds will hold you tight,
And you will lose all your might.

So now’s your chance to come with me
Where you will be forever free
There will be no hate, torture or greed;
This is real peace, beyond what you’ve ever seen.
Because there is always this chance
To fall and stay into this trance
Of kind laughter and happiness
Oh, I wish to stay like this.

Now look into those eyes of Red;
And you will see that his heart is dead.
There is no space to release this pain,
He has every reason to be ashamed.
Do you want to be like this?
When there is no place to be in bliss?

If you truly wish to be free;
Then come with me and you will see,
That there is a great world of green;
More beautiful than you’ve ever seen.
Now come with me and you will find;
That you have come to paradise.

Im gonna post in here when i get the chance, i have a few emotions that ive written down over time and would like to enter it...

Wow i like the 2 you did there green very lyricy i could definatly see that in a song

@ Jazz: Thats a poem? Its really cool, what made you think of it, it sounds like one of those things that you think of after being inspired by something you know... Not like a poem of incomplete thoughts built together as one only to be heard and hear the miscommunication with each word when each word should be working together... I liked it a lot

cheers :)

I don't know what it is really. I just wrote it a few days ago, I might turn it into a song...

I was listening to some Native American music and I thought about how horrified they must have been when their entire world changed in such a short time... from open scenery to tall, suffocating cities. These words came to mind I guess.

I don't often show the forum my lyrics, and I have to admit I was a little embarrassed just posting them. (still am) but it's just what I was thinking about at the time. :) I'm glad you like it.

@ GreenHorn,

Sorry I didn't actually post my reply to yours. I really liked them both, but I think I prefer Last Words the most. You've got some talent there! :D

Yah i like last words too, very sentimental very pretty.

YEah i rarely show anyone my lyrics, even my band mates...

@EMB5490
Thank you very much,to tell you the truth I really just started writing like this...this was the frist thing I ever wront and I would like to see you writong as well. :)

Colors of Us
White: Means we all are special in are own way, becuse no snow drop is that of the same.
Black: Help us see that everything is not as it seems, because night can fool even the greatest of eyes.
Red: Shows that we all bleed the same, because no humen being bleeds in no different way.
Blue: Tells us its okay to let out the pain, becuse even the sky needs to rain some day
Yellow: Give us hope for a better tomorrow, becuse the sun comes with bright shine the next day.
Green: Show us to not let anything hold us down, becuse mother nature always finds a way.

@Jazzy
lol, thats okay and thank you. I have had some people tell me I had some talent in it, only if I just started to do this. :P
but I really like yours! :D
I even think I got a idea of something to write from it so thank you. :]

Suburbs

Jackals of friday night, shames and cries
Liquids to forget, fists to forfeit
You lived in a light, on suburbs they depart this life.
you slept in the satin, but night had a cries

concrete bunkers, lean on eachothers
so many lightspots, bleeds their lights.
depressions in frigids, who calls maternity clinics?
On suburb shadows, horus help them to meadows.

Im a blind man, I cant cry no more.


Just a slumber of...
Empirism

@Empirism
It's pretty good. :)
But it need some build around it,
if you know what I mean. :\