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Fading Away
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The world is almost over, and now is the time to go.
It's nothing unexpected - draw nigh and close out the show.
The hopelessness surrounds you, burries deep within.
Before the morning's glory, the darkness has to end.
It's too late for this world, going down in the sea.
Abandon ship for your sake before it's too late.
You must go now or you will not see the light of day.
Get out now, with your soul, and you may lay. The world is fading away.
The one who's called I am, father God, is almost here.
Once I was blind to see, but he's it all so clear.
While I'm here, I'm hurting inside for the one astray.
But when I'm there, in his arms, it'll be ok.
It's too late for this world, going down in the sea.
Abandon ship for your sake before it's too late.
You must go now or you will not see the light of day.
Get out now, with your soul, and you may lay. The world is fading away.
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http://media.putfile.com/The-American-Brits---Fading-Away
That's the foundation I'm working up from. I have a few ideas for the lead guitar, but I'm not sure which one to use. You can expect the same instrumentation found in "Fight The Tide". |
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Updated version: http://media.putfile.com/The-American-Brits---Fading-Away-78
Note: the instrument heard in the background is not a guitar, it's a bass.
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telecrater |
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Pro's: the song had the mood of some Floyd,
Con's: I don't dig the bass part at all. I also think that you held some of those notes way too long when your singing.
I would recomend building a bridge or a break in the song before the last part.
Keep up the good work |
TheAmericanBrit |
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Snap, I didn't turn down the bass. |
CTown |
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Overall, outstanding effort. Nice tribute to Oasis in there.
"The world is fading away" - I thought is a cool ‘hook’ and maybe you can play on that with a bit of repetition (ie...The world is fading away, fading away, fading away, the world is fading away) maybe with a back up vocal type thing.
What I'm not so sure about is that throughout the whole song, you allude to God subtly but then the lyric “Father God” kind of hits me like a two by four. IMO I’d prefer something less direct. (Ie. “The one who's called I am, father to us, is almost here” or “The one who's called I am, oh you know He’s almost here”) Hope that makes sense.
I really liked the leads you had in Fight the Tide, so looking forward to hear what you have in store for this one. By the way, it seems like you’ve built up quite the prolific song list. How many originals do you have now?
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TheAmericanBrit |
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About 11 (for this album).
I understand what you mean by being subtle about the lyrics. I just wanted to proclaim it, rather than hint at it. I mean, I wanted to say "I'm talking about God" rather than "I MIGHT be talking about God".
BTW: Oasis tribute? |
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Update: http://media.putfile.com/The-American-Brits---Fading-Away-69
The solo is mostly improv, so it may sound a bit off. Umm, the last bit with the guitars is me trying to use a metal technique (trilling, I think), and since I don't play metal, it's not quite perfect. I turned the bass down, too.
I'm going to put in more leads for the first half of the song (I know, it's lacking there).
I record all my leads with audacity after I record everything else with my workstation (that way, I can add effects to the lead guitar without adding it to the vocals and whatnot), so any bad or off timing is due to latency.
Note: After I post an update, the links before it are no good. |
TheAmericanBrit |
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bump for more opinions |
JazzMaverick |
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You remind me of the band Delirious. Nice job. I started harmonising my own voice to this one, was pretty fun.
Are you talking about the rapture?
Your voice is also getting a lot better. |
CTown |
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TheAmericanBrit says: BTW: Oasis tribute? In reference to 'Morning Glory'...What's the story
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TheAmericanBrit |
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Thanks, I appreciate it.
Yes, I was indeed talking about the rapture. But, I wasn't quite focusing on the rapture as much as I was focusing on the fact that this world won't last forever. We really ought to focus on The Word of The Lord. Why? Because though Heaven and Earth shall pass away, his Word will never pass away. |
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CTown says: In reference to 'Morning Glory'...What's the story
Oh, duh. Should have caught that.
Anyway, it's not actually a nod to Oasis, though I could understand how one would see it like that. Kinda like with the "morning glory" lyric in "Country House" by Blur. |
JazzMaverick |
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I kind of think of something else when you say "morning glory".
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wow... that is.. amazing! very touching song, particularly the 2nd verse. love it, id buy this lol |
TheAmericanBrit |
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Thanks, mate. I'm ya`ll like it. |
TheAmericanBrit |
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JazzMaverick says: I kind of think of something else when you say "morning glory".
Get your mind out of the gutter, miss. |
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I was thinking of the flower. But that works too. |
TheAmericanBrit |
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Haha, way to specify.
Anyway... |
Empirism |
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Song is good. Can be noticed again as TheAmericanBrits. Most work you have in mixing. For me guitar and singing comes from center again. When you have just guitar and vocal, its kinda difficult to get sound produced.
If you can, you could try to use double tracks, another guitar to pure left, another guitar to pure right if using mono tracks, that I think you did. When they are in different sides, you can equalize each track a different way which produce rich sounding guitar track.
Your vocal is somehow bit metallic or dark and have also not much stereo effect. Try duplicating vocal tracks there too, but give it more tight panorate than guitar.
But anyway. Nice song, keep up the good work m8.
Cheers!
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TheAmericanBrit |
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Well, I might put in a piano playing the root notes (at a pretty low octave). |
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You know you want me to play the piano in your song... ;) |
TheAmericanBrit |
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No, I want someone with talent...
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then thats y u urself arent playing piano.....hmmm.... :P |
TheAmericanBrit |
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I actually played my own variation of "Chopsticks" on a keyboard without ever touching one, so...
For my sound, the piano/synth bits are dead simple. I think my basslines have been more interesting, honestly. |
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Mwahaha >:D |
TheAmericanBrit |
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Wrong.
God created man, then thought to himself "I can do better". God then created woman, and then he thought to himself "Well, I guess third time's the charm...".
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JazzMaverick |
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Keep telling yourself that love! :P It's ok. |
Empirism |
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God created a man. But then, he got better idea... Give a man something to pleasure him. Oops, soz.
edit: Then he created a guitar. |
TheAmericanBrit |
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Empirism says: God created a man. But then, he got better idea... Give a man something to pleasure him. Oops, soz.
edit: Then he created a guitar.
Yup. I mean, it's kind of hard to find pleasure in nagging. |
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I'm stuck with sexist men!
The entire race of Women say: "You're all fired!" Now none of you will get laid! Mwahahaha |
TheAmericanBrit |
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That reminds me of this saying: Win her over!..........with chloroform...
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hum.. i feel different.. i actually need women to survive...
my excuses to the rest of the males in here.. you can all have each other.. :s |
TheAmericanBrit |
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Your excuses? I think you mean "my apologies".
Can't make it without a woman, eh? Dude, if you don't know how to be by yourself, what the hell are you gonna do with someone else? I'm sick of people going, "Where my man at?", or, "Where my woman at?". Baby, that time alone is for you to be working on YOURSELF, that way you'll be ready for that person who will come into your life.
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TheAmericanBrit |
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JazzMaverick says: You know you want me to play the piano in your song... ;)
Well, if you wanted to record a piano part over it, that`d be cool. I'd really like to hear how it would sound.
A vocal harmony on the chorus wouldn't hurt either, but that's just me...;) |
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TheAmericanBrit says: Your excuses? I think you mean "my apologies".
my english is not very good. as you can notice. :\
when i said i can't be without a woman i was making a joke, as if i was calling you ***.. got it? :p funny huh? -_- |
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haha. Women are great and you know it. It's the only reason why this world isn't destroyed already.
I'm up for that, tell me what you want and i'll see what I can do. Harmony wise, would you mind if I improvised? I like to experiment with my vocals and certain parts of songs. Unless you want a certain part. Or we could make two different versons. :D |
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JazzMaverick says: haha. Women are great and you know it. It's the only reason why this world isn't destroyed already.
I'm up for that, tell me what you want and i'll see what I can do. Harmony wise, would you mind if I improvised? I like to experiment with my vocals and certain parts of songs. Unless you want a certain part. Or we could make two different versons. :D
You kidding? Women are the reason this world sucks.
I'd like to hear a piano playing low root notes during the chorus. You can experiment (*wink* *wink*) with little piano runs on the intro, and when we come back into the second verse. As for vocals, you can do whatever you want - Just make sure it sounds good. |
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You know what sucks? My workstation's drive went nanners, and all of my settings were deleted (or reset, if you will). Effect settings, EQ settings - Everything.
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Want me to name every single anime that's in this picture?! :D (I'm a nerd, I know, it's so cool)
You should always have a backup of your stuff. On a pendrive, hard drive, internet storage sites or anything of the sort.
www.photobucket.com is a good one to start. (it stores more than photos)
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You can name every anime there...............FAIL.
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