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Joined: 27 May 2008 Canada  Lessons: 2 Licks: 1 Karma: 25
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some lyrics i came up with today pretty much off the top of my head. I dont have my notepad on me atm so these might be a little different than I actually wrote
"I bring home girls like a dog bringing a bird to his masters feet
just hoping you'll be pleased with me.
But I just get scolded for leaving that dove on the floor,
I look at my feet as you point at the door.
I go out hunting and I keep losing my trail
Keep thinking I see tracks, but they're not really there.
I go home to daddy and he locks me in a cage,
and the I wait, I wait for another day.
But please show yourself some day,
please show yourself some day."
right now it has kinda a country feel to it. basically an A, D, A, E progression. i think i'll probably change it though. I'll probably write some more verses, but i might leave it short and sweet. depends on how long it is right now
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Joined: 27 May 2008 Canada  Lessons: 2 Licks: 1 Karma: 25
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bump |
AlexB |
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Joined: 13 Jul 2009 Mexico  Licks: 2 Karma: 23
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Yep,you need more verses bro! so far so good |
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Joined: 27 May 2008 Canada  Lessons: 2 Licks: 1 Karma: 25
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"I keep going in circles, just chasing my tail
Trying to forget, but theres too many details,
your colorful feathers and your beautiful song.
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i need a last line, any suggestions? |
case211 |
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Joined: 26 Feb 2009 United States  Lessons: 2 Licks: 6 Karma: 24
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"I like to wear my pink thong"? lol jk
Not sure man, depends really on your mood about the song.
I wrote(or actually am still writing) a song that has a very dark appeal throughout, but the ending isn't somehow, it changes the mood of the whole song and really affects the tone. |
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Joined: 27 May 2008 Canada  Lessons: 2 Licks: 1 Karma: 25
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"I bring home girls like a dog bringing a bird to his masters feet
just hoping you'll be pleased with me.
But I just get scolded for leaving that dove on the floor,
I look at my feet as you point at the door.
I keep going in circles, just chasing my tail
Trying to forget, but there's too many details,
your colorful feathers and your beautiful song.
I have to catch you before you're gone
When night rolls around I bark at the moon
Don't know what you're gonna say, but I hope you reply soon
I've been looking for you, but I can't see through this fog
Why would you come, I'm just an old, lonely bird dog
I go out hunting and I keep losing my trail
Keep thinking I see tracks, but they're not really there.
I go home to daddy and he locks me in a cage,
where I sit and wait, I sit and wait for another day.
But please show yourself some day,
please show yourself some day.
please show yourself some day."
final i think, may make some tweeks, might be able to get a crappy recording of it done this weekend |
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