My First Crack At It

My first shot at songwriting, so here it goes. (Not really a song, more of just a few verses i wrote)

Your cheeks turn a little red
When he's around
When he's around

You let your hair down
When he's around
When he's around

You laugh at the jokes he tells
When i don't even get them
I don't even get them

(This is probably where i wander...)

My hand you use to hold
has now gotten so cold
The warmth is his now

And your arms that use to be
so wrapped up in me
Your His Now

I use to believe you
I use to trust you
Everything i did, i did it for you

Be Brutal...

Reminds me of The Cure.

Simple lyrics that can mean a lot or a little depending on the music and singing.

"Use" is different than "Used".

Bump

Good simple can be good (although I'd like a lush arrangement behind this piano acoustic guitar strings etc but that's me)

and +1 to tsb everytime you used "use" you should have wrote "used".

thumbs up! now put the melody into it :)