part of a song I'm writing

Some words I've jotted over time. music is in Dmaj - kind of a light happy tone.

Verse 1

I remember times
When I’d fall from my flight to the ground
I would call upon someone who wasn’t around
And it seemed when I’d land it would never make a sound
And I wondered if anyone out there could see me


Verse 2

Laying in the hands
Of the Earth as I begin to see
I am not the only one who has secrets to keep
As they fall I am surrounded by subtle relief
That I am not alone in this
Struggle - for comfort

I like it, would like to hear it once you put music to it.

thx les.

I have some progressions I've been messing around with for the lyrics - actually I've been working on several other tunes at the moment, I need to jump back on these lyrics and finish!

Keep 'em coming. It's nice to see lyrics with a kind of "upswing" feel.

Add some more lyrics and music i think it would be a good song

I like it so far.
Sounds cool.
You should finish it then record it and put some guitar in it and I think it'd be cool.

thx alot for the comments, its nice to get natural and mature critisism without the drama and idiocracy like some music forums, im sure you guys know what i mean. one in particular is tabcrawler.com, several years back i joined and was on the forums daily - couldnt get a word in without some idiot trying to talk crap hah.